Where You Were (Draft 2)

(Draft 2)

I descended over there
where back roads cross

I went down ’cause it’s
a scene of a double-cross

now I’m going where if I’d die
I’d be seen at the crossroads, seen

where famous blues are wailed. Hey
have sympathy for me if I’d say
there’ll be no blue moon tonight

No, I’m descending to
the crossroads
because I know

you sang so sweetly once,
riding to the crossroads
touching me a blue moon.

No, I’m descending to remember
’cause I know the crossroads are dark

— Douglas Gilbert

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2 thoughts on “Where You Were (Draft 2)

    1. Thanks. Yeah, I like this much better because it’s not like the song. The first draft bothered me because it came much too close. Scattering the allusions in this one I think makes it original. The first one had too many phrases like “going down to the crossroads” which sounds like just copying. That one was embarrassing. And now I’m wondering again if Ode to Sloopy 7 is original enough. I should figure out how to write a song from scratch — I don’t seem able to do that. I don’t know what the problem is.

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