Giraffe (Draft 5)

Giraffe (Draft 5)

There is a giraffe who reads my words for me
stands up tall because she loves me like a high leaf

She has a reading every Friday at the club
and they love her because she is so beautiful
and she is so slim and long necked, yes!

She is so cool when
she reaches high
and reaches low

She has no stage fright and
her heart beats true always for me;
I think she can throb for me
without a worry about her heart
except if she would think I would not kiss her neck, but

I would and would all over
and even take her hand for
an innocent walk in the woods

just because I want to
share the moon with her
and do a silly howl or
a lullaby for a Friday night
when she comes home with me
high on applause but
waiting for me to clap
and I do of course, because

we will turn many leaves indeed
just like we always knew some day
we would learn to speak
the language of love like
the necking of the Sun and the Moon,
light on a leaf of belief standing tall.

— Douglas Gilbert


3 thoughts on “Giraffe (Draft 5)

  1. Your additions fixed the ending’s ‘wondering’ feel that the first draft had. The ‘would all over’ made me all warm and excited feeling. And even though I’m kind of chicken sometimes and the woods at night have always kind of scared me a little I don’t think I’d be afraid at all if you held my hand. In fact, looking at the Moon with you and a silly howl or a lullaby sounds perfectly romantic. I think learning the language of love with you would feel natural. I like the necking of the Sun and Moon, it goes great with the giraffe/neck theme. I love ‘light on a leaf of belief standing tall’ at the end too, because the leaf feels like it ties the whole poem together like a big circle since it begins with the high leaf in the first lines. The whole poem is beautiful…I love it.

    1. Thanks very much and thanks for the suggestions about the first draft. I don’t think I would have come up with these refinements otherwise. Thanks.

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