Playing Around (Draft 1)

Playing Around (Draft 1)

Don’t worry Babe
about playing around.

(Haven’t been to school so…)
You know I have to play, and
can’t take the geetar to a seminar —

y’know, just t’ the honky-tonk only
and y’know I wouldn’t fool around
with the bar girls; no just take a few
peanuts from counter and wouldn’t
get my gherkin in a pickle, or
drop a geetar pick in the wrong place

You know I have to play, and
can’t take the geetar to a seminar —
Don’t know nothing about hoity-culture
or haute cuisine so y’know maybe

I could still love you even if I still
knock grits on the floor
and spill beer in the garden

don’t know if you could school me babe
’cause schooling’s not my thing
can’t play my geetar at the seminar

You know the honk-tonk
pays me in gherkins and peanuts
and I have to play around —
no not that — wouldn’t ever
twist myself into a pretzel of lies

maybe we could be cooking
and water the garden with love

maybe I’d put on a tie
and play my guitar for you
like I’ve been to school
though mums the word

You know I have to play, and
can’t take the guitar to a seminar,
but we could learn a new song together
under the moon light with whiskey,
a beer, and a chrysandymum’s rose

— Douglas Gilbert

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4 thoughts on “Playing Around (Draft 1)

  1. I’ve never been into schooling either, it was always too much sitting still for me to really enjoy (although I did usually make good grades). I do love to dance though and sometimes I’m good at singing along – if you wanted to learn a new song together, then maybe I could dance my way into your heart. I’ve always believed that everything grows better with love…

    1. That’s a nice summary and poetic with your charm. Thanks. I never did do my idea of going out on the beach in front of the ocean and trying to teach myself how to sing and now it’s too cold and I have a cough. Oh well, I waited too long. I used to like to dance just by the feeling until everyone told me how bad I was. i had a good time when nobody said anything and I didn’t know how foolish I looked.
         I see from your paragraph:

      Schooling’s never loved me
      when I couldn’t sit still, but
      I got good grades

      I know you could dance with me
      if you’d let me teach you love
      and I’d give you a good grade

      We won’t have to sit still
      when I teach you my song:

      I have a harmony in mind
      and I believe that the
      voice of love is a sweet duet

      Well, it’s a little awkward in spots but I was just thinking about poetic elements that prose often has.

          I’m looking at “chrysandymum” which was supposed to be a cute mispronunciation for “chrysanthemum” and now I’m thinking since “sandy” in embedded there, I could use the name “Sandy” in the poem. And I think it should be “a counter” instead of “counter.”

      1. Oh, i love my comment with your magical poetic touch! I’m going to see if I can think of something to add to it. You compliment me perfectly – i bet you’d be the perfect dancing partner, although i’ve never really had a partner before so we’d have to learn together. Yeah, i’ve always been a little shy about my ‘dance’. I guess I haven’t really shown people because i wouldn’t want to be teased and made to feel silly for something that feels so good. Oh, I noticed the Chrysandymum, I liked that, i meant to say something about it but i guess it slipped my mind. ‘the counter’ might sound good too, but i agree, it does need an ‘a’ or ‘the’ or something there. I’m going to eat some lunch and then I’ll see what i can come up with to add to our little comment poem…

  2. Oh, I don’t know…I’ve been trying to add on to it but I’m having trouble thinking of anything good lately.

    Schooling’s never loved me
    ’cause I couldn’t sit still, but
    I got good grades

    I know you could dance with me
    if you’d let me teach you love
    and I’d give you a good grade;
    an A++ with a kiss for luck

    but dearest I have a secret –
    i’ve never had a dancing partner

    but I’m not worried ’cause
    we won’t have to sit still
    when I teach you my song:

    I have a harmony in mind
    and I believe that
    the voice of our love
    is the sweetest duet and
    that together we could learn
    moves that can’t be taught in
    the confines in a classroom

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