Marching Into A Wall (Draft 3)

Marching Into a Wall (Draft 3)

Somebody told me that:

The young are alive with music
popcorn and parading, mostly
in open futures, but

When death marches into us
it’s like walking the wrong way in a parade

you can crash into a hearty marcher,
sometimes get hit by a drumstick
or by a slice of pizza by a bystander

Sometimes you
crash into an enveloping bass tuba
a little too base for a cornucopia, and

some of those who
look like angels will
hit you with a baton

The beat of the drums
is a blast that doesn’t last,
and everyone knows
you’re going the wrong way.

Yes but,
somebody told me that

Was it you?
I’m thinking,

There’s still time, and
could we be cynical together
in the philosophy department, and

write papers under the table
until romantic love
seemed playful.

you know,
I think scholars
are sexy

but I can’t prove it.

Could we meet
in the faculty lounge
and exchange data
that is fluid in interpretation.

Oh hell,
I’m just old and afraid

I don’t want the committee to love my paper

I just want you.

— Douglas Gilbert


3 thoughts on “Marching Into A Wall (Draft 3)

  1. I like the new addition, it’s like a totally different poem with all that you added. Hey, I think scholars are sexy too…I probably need to do a little more research before i’m positive though. I like the new ending.

    1. Thanks. I think I can upgrade this to 8+. There were a few things that were bothering me. It was too esoteric and abstract or something and you gave me some ideas. I think it’s a much better blend. Thanks. Oddly, by waiting, it makes it unique I think because it’s just on the brink of incoherence but somehow not. I think if I had planned it from start to finish originally it would be dull.

      1. You’re welcome…i’m glad to have helped. I think it turned out great and it does blend nicely. I guess waiting sometimes makes things better, maybe because more details come to the light over time…I don’t know though. But i think it’s definitely an 8+…maybe even a 9?

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