If We Were A Storm (Draft 0)

If I Were A Storm (Draft 0)

Sometimes I feel like even the wind
can’t hear me, and I’m going to blow away

Oh I wish when the wind listens
it swiftly carries many swooshy messages to you
because I believe we are a hurricane
waiting to happen, or a tornado

This could be the twist
that is manifest when
your hot front
meets my cool façade
and we’d be such a gentle storm
that the mix would be a bliss

— Douglas Gilbert

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2 thoughts on “If We Were A Storm (Draft 0)

  1. Oh, I love this one, i love it when the air is fog-free and I can easily feel your swooshy messages carried in the wind. “A hurricane waiting to happen or a tornado” is really good too…so much energy and emotion in those storms…sometimes i feel like you know me so well. I love the ending…”your hot front meets my cool façade” made me smile, i have to agree the mix would be bliss…

    1. Oh great, neato. I was so uncertain about this that I called it draft 0 instead of draft 1 because I thought it was a fragment of a thought. But now with a little bit of encouragement I think it’s OK. Yeah, it at least deserves to be a draft 1. I don’t know what I was thinking when I didn’t like it. At the moment it seems fine.

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