Spaghetti (Draft 1)


Turning on the light
my hand made a shadow
that needed to be drawn

Thinking of you
I made a doodle on a paper
a scribble of a pasta in the past
when I made the meat balls
and you the sauciness

We were a cute melody
and the swallows loved
our shallow songs

I knew we had a shallow song in the rain
when you carried your noodle soup, and
we stood in a puddle with your poodle
being strung out in tangles seeming tame

— Douglas Gilbert


6 thoughts on “Spaghetti (Draft 1)

  1. Oh I love it! I especially liked the meatballs and the sauciness part… and the “swallows loved our shallow songs”. And the ending 4 lines are perfect…I used to eat noodle soup all the time when I was sick a lot and the puddle and poodle are great…so is the tangles seeming tame. You know, oddly enough the other comment I just left on your other poem seems to correspond with this somewhat too. This reminds me, I’ve been meaning to learn how to make home made meatballs…

    1. Thanks. My Mother used to make meatballs and I used to make them myself, but I’ve forgotten all about them. I don’t know… I used to think they were magical but it’s just sort of like a round meatloaf and doesn’t seem that special. Well I guess there are ways with the right amount of spices and rolling them in the frying pan carefully so they don’t lose their shape… Now that I think about it, it does seem a bit silly because we had spaghetti and meatballs and then as soon as it was served we broke open the meatballs and broke them into small pieces with a fork and tossed everything. So we could have just cooked spiced hamburgers flat in a frying pan, cut it into pieces and added it to spaghetti and tomato sauce. The ceremony of the shape I don’t think actually added to the taste. Well, except that she was proud of her meatballs…

      1. I bet her meatballs (and yours) were delicious…I wonder if being in a ball shape keeps the center more tender than cooking them in a patty shape does? I’ve never made them from scratch. The last time I made them I used frozen ones and used an alfredo sauce that I added a bunch of spices and some onions to. It was sort of like a white-spaghetti dish (because of my tomato allergy) but it was really good. I made these cheesy breadsticks to go along with it. When I was a kid my mom usually just made a ground beef meat sauce for the spaghetti.

    1. Sometimes I know how to turn. Sometimes I know how to be on…hmm maybe I could re-use the first stanza. [odd, that I was thinking “you can’t copy.” And then I realized I wrote it so other self go right ahead…

      1. I was trying to write something with your hand and turn and on but so far it just sounds like something that would lead up to a racy part in a cheesy romance novel…(giggling). I’ll see what I can do with it, there might be hope for it yet.
        Oh and I think it’s perfectly acceptable to copy from yourself…it’s not really copying if it’s yours to begin with.

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